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Bad Dialogue

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David Farland's writing hint today about bad dialogue is spot on! I will now make changes to my 2nd quarter story. Basically, dialogue is whatever should not be said by narration. Doh! wotf012

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Posted : January 27, 2020 8:38 am
R.J.K. Lee
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Yeah, I noticed that one. Dialogue is definitely one of those things I find myself using a lot in first drafts and editing out later on. Dialogue is important. It’s just a matter of when to use it well. My possible entry for Q2 had that issue too and I’m doing my best to sort out a balance between the conversational feel of the piece and inserting more non-conversation passages.

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Posted : January 27, 2020 9:55 am
Dustin Adams
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Here it is:


1x 3rd place
2x Finalist
2x Semi
9x Silver
11x HM
7x R

Posted : January 27, 2020 8:34 pm
Wulf Moon
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This is funny. I actually planned a Good Dialogue exercise for Super Secrets for about three months now. I've been waiting for the right time to write it.

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Posted : January 28, 2020 7:53 am
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Here it is:

So good!

Posted : July 7, 2020 9:21 pm
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Here it is:

That was amusing. Also, don't forget the cartoonish dialogue tags, like countenance, stammer, mutter, lilt, and ejaculate. Yes, I've read that last one in a friend's story before.

Posted : July 22, 2020 12:31 pm
Dustin Adams
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Yes, I've read that last one in a friend's story before.



1x 3rd place
2x Finalist
2x Semi
9x Silver
11x HM
7x R

Posted : July 23, 2020 2:16 am