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Shockhawk
(@shockhawk)
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Greetings Forumittes:

I recently finished editing my first draft for my third quarter entry. Anyone wanna swap critiques?

Not exactly sure how to do this but let’s meet by the watering hole in the middle of the night!! Secret handshake must include two slaps, one rock pound, and at least one spirit fingers wiggle or else I flee back into hiding.

Shockhawk

Now! This is it! Now is the time to choose! Die and be free of pain, or live and fight your sorrow! Now is the time to shape your stories! Your fate is in your hands! - Auron FFX
Vol 37 - X, R, R, R
vol 38 - HM, X, WIP

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Topic starter Posted : June 1, 2020 6:28 am
Reuben
(@reuben)
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Posts: 216

You would probably rather someone with a HM to their name, but I'm always open. If you're interested, just drop me a PM.

Success is going from failure to failure without loss of enthusiasm ~ Winston Churchill
V37: R, R, R, HM
V38: SHM

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Posted : June 1, 2020 8:08 am
RETreasure
(@rschibler)
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Posts: 743

Sure, I'll take a look. PM me!

V34: R,HM,R
V35: HM,R,R,HM
V36: R,HM,HM,SHM
V37: HM,SF,SHM,SHM
V38: F, SHM, P, P
Available for critiques - PM for availability.
www.rebeccaetreasure.com

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Posted : June 1, 2020 8:32 am
Rey Nichols
(@rnichols)
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Posts: 56

I am also willing to take a look as well, send me a PM.

HM: 5
R: 1
www.reynichols.com

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Posted : June 1, 2020 3:55 pm
Scafontaine
(@scafontaine)
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Posts: 119

If you're looking for more crits, I'm willing. PM me.

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Posted : June 1, 2020 10:44 pm
Shockhawk
(@shockhawk)
Advanced Member
Posts: 28

To All:

Thank you so so much for all the offers of support. I ended up sending it to Rueben and he responded with a full critique before I even woke up the next day... then life happened (we sold our house and found a new house to buy and are moving on the 30th of this month (yeah for timing)- assuming escrow goes through)...Hence my disappearing act. Anyways I love that you all are willing to help but I'm pretty sure since I'm moving I wont have much more time to devote to this quarters entry. I edited a bunch of stuff that Rueben showed me (loved the critique by the way - learned a lot - like don't use "as" very much, when you do use it make the action part go first because it flows better and don't use so many adjectives to start sentences)... super helpful stuff for a newbie.

Anyways I'm rambling. Thank you, thank you, thank you. Rein-checks for next quarter?

Shockhawk

Now! This is it! Now is the time to choose! Die and be free of pain, or live and fight your sorrow! Now is the time to shape your stories! Your fate is in your hands! - Auron FFX
Vol 37 - X, R, R, R
vol 38 - HM, X, WIP

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Topic starter Posted : June 12, 2020 3:31 pm
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