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Dustin Adams
(@tj_knight)
Posts: 1354
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That's the beauty of 450's. They don't have to be perfect. They can be experimental. They can be ideas or first drafts.

I'll send by e-mail in a few minutes.

Career:

1x Win
2x NW-F
2x S-F
9x S-HM
11x HM
7x R

 
Posted : April 26, 2012 8:43 am
David K
(@david-k)
Posts: 149
Bronze Star Member
 

I'm up for another round if anyone has a 450 ready for exchange.

I'm trying something new this time. Need to know if I'm on the right track...

Hey Dustin - I'm up for it. Send me something and I'll send you my current story in progress.

Regards,

David

Very sporadic submitter but 9 HMs: latest Q1 2021
Author of Gateway Through Time: Available at https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/1112672

 
Posted : April 26, 2012 9:22 am
 MJNL
(@mjnl)
Posts: 505
Silver Star Member
 

Woo-hoo, jumping in her early (for me) this quarter.

The story I was hoping to use as my Q3 just isn't cooperating. So I'm going to do a little experiment and resend a story the contest has already seen, but has been slightly reworked. It's a story that all of my readers proclaim is one of their favorites, and I still really believe in it, so...we'll see.

If you want to exchange 450s, just pm me.

~Marina

WotF Winner Q1 2012 (Vol. 29)

WotF Finalist Q2 2010 (Vol. 27)
WotF Finalist Q4 2011 (Vol. 28)
http://lostetter.wordpress.com/
http://twitter.com/#!/MarinaLostetter

 
Posted : May 8, 2012 3:43 am
(@strycher)
Posts: 667
Silver Star Member
 

Any body still swapping 450s? PM me?

"The Filigreed Cage" || "Bitter Remedy" || "Heartless" || "The Newsboy's Last Stand" || "Planar Ghosts"

 
Posted : May 16, 2012 6:18 am
(@ember)
Posts: 85
Bronze Member
 

I'm good to go for 450s.

My Q3 is going to be a much longer beast than I usually write, and feels different to my other stories. Plus this is me having my first go at writing specifically for the contest.

Also having feedback on the beginning might inspire me to get the thing finished!

---------------------------
Call me - "klevang" - my login if registration issues get fixed.

Volume 33: Q2 - R ,Q3 - SHM

The "real" Ember is a good friend and let me borrow her account, she won with "Half Past" in Vol. 31

 
Posted : May 22, 2012 4:09 pm
(@strycher)
Posts: 667
Silver Star Member
 

I'm good to go for 450s.

My Q3 is going to be a much longer beast than I usually write, and feels different to my other stories. Plus this is me having my first go at writing specifically for the contest.

Also having feedback on the beginning might inspire me to get the thing finished!

I e-mailed you.

"The Filigreed Cage" || "Bitter Remedy" || "Heartless" || "The Newsboy's Last Stand" || "Planar Ghosts"

 
Posted : May 23, 2012 1:20 am
Dustin Adams
(@tj_knight)
Posts: 1354
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I wouldn't mind another set of eyes on my revised 450.

I'll PM my e-mail to you.

D

Career:

1x Win
2x NW-F
2x S-F
9x S-HM
11x HM
7x R

 
Posted : May 23, 2012 3:28 am
(@george-nik)
Posts: 494
Silver Star Member
 

Anyone who's still interested in an exchange, please PM me or e-mail me. I've got a few stories at the moment whose impact on people I'd like to test, so I'm game for any number of exchanges.

George Nikolopoulos
WOTF: 1 SF, 1 SHM, 4 HM
Fiction (EN): 43 stories sold, 29 published
Fiction (GR): c.10 stories published & a children’s novel
Amazon Page

 
Posted : May 23, 2012 10:07 am
(@bobsandiego)
Posts: 394
Silver Member
 

I'd happy to exhanged my 450 with anyone looking for feedback on their first 450. I think this is a great idea, and personally I think opening, for me, are really hard to get correct.

you can PM me or email me at bobevans (at) robertmitchellevans(dot)com

Literary saboteur
Blog: http://www.robertmitchellevans.com/
HM X 5
SF X 3
F X 1
Current Rejection Streak: 0

 
Posted : May 23, 2012 10:40 am
(@writetolive)
Posts: 224
Bronze Star Member
 

I'm game. PM Me if you're interested.

Michael Beers
Blog: Write To Live
Latest Out: Detroit Ex Nihilo at AESciFi
Now Available: Zion in For All Eternity: Tales of the Seven Deadly Sins (Dark Opus Press)

 
Posted : May 26, 2012 4:56 am
(@dantzel)
Posts: 299
Silver Member
 

Okay I have a special request for my Q3 450 - would anyone be willing to read the original 450 words, and the updated version? This story was originally written for Q2, and sent off to three different markets before it got stuck for 3 months missing the Q2 deadline. Initially I loved this story but 6 months have taken their toll! I promised myself that I'd only edit the first part if needed, and I have no fresh eyes in the 'real' world to look at this at the moment.

Any takers?

Vol 29 Q3 Semi Finalist

http://www.dantzelcherry.com

 
Posted : June 4, 2012 4:35 pm
(@morshana)
Posts: 816
Gold Member
 

Sure!

Jeanette Gonzalez

HM x4, SHM x2, F x1

 
Posted : June 4, 2012 6:07 pm
 MJNL
(@mjnl)
Posts: 505
Silver Star Member
 

Seriously needing some more 450 love. PM me if you're interested!

~Marina

WotF Winner Q1 2012 (Vol. 29)

WotF Finalist Q2 2010 (Vol. 27)
WotF Finalist Q4 2011 (Vol. 28)
http://lostetter.wordpress.com/
http://twitter.com/#!/MarinaLostetter

 
Posted : June 12, 2012 2:45 am
(@morshana)
Posts: 816
Gold Member
 

I'm interested in exchanges, too.

Jeanette Gonzalez

HM x4, SHM x2, F x1

 
Posted : June 12, 2012 3:02 am
(@seagirl)
Posts: 4
New Member
 

I know it's late, but I'd love to. I'd also love to get someone's feedback who is not related to me or my friend for the past X amount of years.

 
Posted : June 12, 2012 7:32 am
 MJNL
(@mjnl)
Posts: 505
Silver Star Member
 

Ok, I think I've finished critting everyone I exchanged with. If I missed someone, please send me an e-mail reminder!

~Marina

WotF Winner Q1 2012 (Vol. 29)

WotF Finalist Q2 2010 (Vol. 27)
WotF Finalist Q4 2011 (Vol. 28)
http://lostetter.wordpress.com/
http://twitter.com/#!/MarinaLostetter

 
Posted : June 18, 2012 3:21 am
(@austindm)
Posts: 358
Silver Member
 

Not to diminish the importance of the celebrations over in the Q1 thread, but I'd like to get some eyes on the story I've got planned for Q4. Anyone up for 450s?

 
Posted : June 19, 2012 2:10 pm
(@strycher)
Posts: 667
Silver Star Member
 

Not to diminish the importance of the celebrations over in the Q1 thread, but I'd like to get some eyes on the story I've got planned for Q4. Anyone up for 450s?

No. I'm not done with Q3 just yet, so no one's allowed to move on to Q4.

::stage hand brings out envelope and hands it to Strycher::

Wait, what? You mean I'm not the center of the universe? WHEN DID THIS HAPPEN?

"The Filigreed Cage" || "Bitter Remedy" || "Heartless" || "The Newsboy's Last Stand" || "Planar Ghosts"

 
Posted : June 19, 2012 2:17 pm
(@austindm)
Posts: 358
Silver Member
 

Not to diminish the importance of the celebrations over in the Q1 thread, but I'd like to get some eyes on the story I've got planned for Q4. Anyone up for 450s?

No. I'm not done with Q3 just yet, so no one's allowed to move on to Q4.

::stage hand brings out envelope and hands it to Strycher::

Wait, what? You mean I'm not the center of the universe? WHEN DID THIS HAPPEN?

Fair enough. Sorry if I'm jumping the gun a bit, but all this excitement has me itching to move forward with this story.

 
Posted : June 19, 2012 2:25 pm
(@morshana)
Posts: 816
Gold Member
 

Not to diminish the importance of the celebrations over in the Q1 thread, but I'd like to get some eyes on the story I've got planned for Q4. Anyone up for 450s?

No. I'm not done with Q3 just yet, so no one's allowed to move on to Q4.

::stage hand brings out envelope and hands it to Strycher::

Wait, what? You mean I'm not the center of the universe? WHEN DID THIS HAPPEN?

Fair enough. Sorry if I'm jumping the gun a bit, but all this excitement has me itching to move forward with this story.

I can trade a 450 word of my Q3 for your Q4, if you don't mind. But not until next week. I'm frantically trying to finish up this draft and then I'm out of town until Sunday night. So if you don't mind waiting until mid-next week for me to get back to you, I'm game.

Jeanette Gonzalez

HM x4, SHM x2, F x1

 
Posted : June 19, 2012 2:32 pm
(@rebecca-birch)
Posts: 625
Silver Star Member
 

I'm up for a first 450 swap. This will be for Q4 for me, but I'm happy to look at Q3s in exchange!

Rebecca Birch
Finalist - 2, SF - 1, SHM - 1, HM - 18, R - 6
Words of Birch
Short Story Collection--Life Out of Harmony and Other Tales of Wonder

 
Posted : June 19, 2012 5:59 pm
(@morshana)
Posts: 816
Gold Member
 

I'm up for a first 450 swap. This will be for Q4 for me, but I'm happy to look at Q3s in exchange!

Cool!

Jeanette Gonzalez

HM x4, SHM x2, F x1

 
Posted : June 20, 2012 2:32 am
WordWeaver
(@wordweaver)
Posts: 4
Active Member
 

Hey everyone! For those of you who haven't met me yet, I'm new here. I'd love if someone would look at my 450. I'm already having Mr. Baker look at it, but all the critique I can get helps, since it's my first one. I'm hoping to finish it by the 30th so I can squeeze into Q3 and get my answer back sooner, but if not Ill just put it in Q4. Any interested parties?

People assume my writing is a logical progression of words from which meaning can be derived, but *actually* from a non-linear, non-subjective viewpoint - it's more like a big ball of wibbly wobbly... time-y wimey... stuff.

 
Posted : June 22, 2012 2:32 am
(@s_c_baker)
Posts: 979
Gold Star Member
Topic starter
 

Okay, super-duper last minute here, but...

Anybody want to look at my Q3 450?

At the last minute, I decided to submit a really old piece I've been wanting to revise for a year or two. All I need to do now is uh... go through its very short 7 pages, expand the thing by about threefold, add in a plot and antagonist and uh... Uh... wotf001

*ahem*

Anyway--I'd appreciate general comments on the opening scene. Smile

Stewart C Baker - 1st place, Q2 V32
My contest history: Semi-finalist, R, HM, R, R, HM, HM, R, R, R, R, HM, R, R, R, R, Winner
My published fiction, poetry, &c.

 
Posted : June 28, 2012 6:44 am
(@rebecca-birch)
Posts: 625
Silver Star Member
 

Okay, super-duper last minute here, but...

Anybody want to look at my Q3 450?

At the last minute, I decided to submit a really old piece I've been wanting to revise for a year or two. All I need to do now is uh... go through its very short 7 pages, expand the thing by about threefold, add in a plot and antagonist and uh... Uh... wotf001

*ahem*

Anyway--I'd appreciate general comments on the opening scene. Smile

I owe you one, Stewart, so toss it my way!

Rebecca Birch
Finalist - 2, SF - 1, SHM - 1, HM - 18, R - 6
Words of Birch
Short Story Collection--Life Out of Harmony and Other Tales of Wonder

 
Posted : June 28, 2012 6:47 am
(@austindm)
Posts: 358
Silver Member
 

Same here.

 
Posted : June 28, 2012 2:28 pm
Dustin Adams
(@tj_knight)
Posts: 1354
Platinum Plus Moderator
 

I'm ready for a Q4, 450 swap if anyone else is.

Don't worry, Rebecca, I haven't forgotten about your full story, I'm just looking for a quick opinion on my Q4 opening. Need to know if I'm overwriting the sucker, or if I'm on track.

Now that I've got a start, I need to log-line this bad boy. wotf013

D

Career:

1x Win
2x NW-F
2x S-F
9x S-HM
11x HM
7x R

 
Posted : July 5, 2012 7:58 am
(@morshana)
Posts: 816
Gold Member
 

I'm ready for a Q4, 450 swap if anyone else is.

Don't worry, Rebecca, I haven't forgotten about your full story, I'm just looking for a quick opinion on my Q4 opening. Need to know if I'm overwriting the sucker, or if I'm on track.

Now that I've got a start, I need to log-line this bad boy. wotf013

D

I'm leaving for vacation tomorrow morning. I want to say yes to this. Send it to me? I'll let you know later today/tonight if I can't get to it.

Jeanette Gonzalez

HM x4, SHM x2, F x1

 
Posted : July 5, 2012 8:17 am
David K
(@david-k)
Posts: 149
Bronze Star Member
 

I'm ready for a Q4, 450 swap if anyone else is.

Don't worry, Rebecca, I haven't forgotten about your full story, I'm just looking for a quick opinion on my Q4 opening. Need to know if I'm overwriting the sucker, or if I'm on track.

Now that I've got a start, I need to log-line this bad boy. wotf013

D

I'm ready if you are Dustin - send it my way

Very sporadic submitter but 9 HMs: latest Q1 2021
Author of Gateway Through Time: Available at https://www.smashwords.com/books/view/1112672

 
Posted : July 5, 2012 11:25 am
(@helen-jackson)
Posts: 28
Advanced Member
 

Dustin, are you still looking for critters, or do you have enough? I have a Q4 450 I'd like to swap. I'll drop you a PM...

http://www.helen-jackson.com
V29. Q2: Silver HM; Q3: R; Q4: R
V30. Q1: HM; Q2: R; Q3: R
V31. Q1: Semi-finalist; Q2: R; Q4: HM

 
Posted : July 6, 2012 12:47 am
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